Post by Ink® on Sept 3, 2008 16:48:19 GMT -7
It's deffinately a nice thought, but it carries on a bit too much. Not to be rude, but I found myself bored halfway through and only finished so that I could give you my honest review. The concept of the poem is nice and I think that if you shortened it a bit it would be a great poem. Also, I think it would be better if it wasn't centered. I know that's a stupid thing to judge it on, but it does make it seem more intimidating to read, not quite the right word there, but for lack of a better one.