Star sight.

[Imagine]

I'm not much of a poet, but ill give it a shot. This is a memory of mine, that I will try to mold into a poem.

The little boy stared with a smile,
as the old man frowned and glared for a while.
The TV was bright and alive with color,
the boy was unaware that the sky was no duller.
The old man stood and held out his hand,
and barked out a curious command.
With a flick of his hand the TV was black,
and the little boy had a coat on his back.
They moved to the front lawn and the boy asked why,
the old man said nothing and peered to the sky.
The stars were shining like crystals of night,
the little boy was stunned, oh what a sight.
The old man smiled and with a pat on the back,
they both were back in, coats on the rack.
The boy was in awe with that spot on the lawn,
and now the TV was seldom on.
Even now that the old man is gone,
the boy is out looking, at times till dawn.
He has grown a passion for those dots in the sky,
when asked why, he will be quick to reply:
The old man has shown me his heaven above,
a place that the two of us share with much love.

I wrote this poem from the memory of my Grandfather taking me away from my TV that I watched all the time, and showing me the beauty of the outside world. I love the stars. I frequently do just go out on my lawn and lay down to watch the stars for hours. I love them.

[Ink®]

Oh, that's really nice. I like the rhyme scheme. And for this poem it works to not have stanzas, sometime poems get ruined if they're like that but in this case it works quite well.

[Imagine]

I'm afraid I don't know the rules and guidelines of poetry writing. This would be the first poem I've ever actually written. If anyone has any suggestions on how to improve it, I'm all ears.

[Ink®]

This is your first one really? That's great for your first one.
Mostly poetry doesn't have rules unless you're doing a specific kind such as haiku. There are various formats and rhyme schemes that you can follow, or you can do free verse. Free verse is usually in stanza of four lines, and there's not rhymes scheme, but of course the stanzas can be longer, like in my poem called [Changes] in the prose section, the stanzas are 14 lines each. Yeah, I don't know though. ^^

[Imagine]

Why thank you : ). Yeah, this is my first one. I've never really tried to write one before, but i've read zillions of poems over he run of my life. All I know is that a poem should flow together. Also, i'm very imaginative so things like this are quite easy to come up with : ).

[Ink®]

Yeah, the sentences are supposed to flow to gether giving the poem rythym so it's easy to read and keeps the attention of the reader and generally poetry should have an apparent theme so that it's easy to tell what the point of it was and the poets feelings towards the subject matter.