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Feline
Sept 7, 2008 6:57:48 GMT -7
Post by Colour or Lour™ on Sept 7, 2008 6:57:48 GMT -7
Alright, time for my first Haiku!!! S'gonna be awesome. Swift and yet subtle He can wait for forever Making his first kill Kind of about a baby feline, aka kitten.
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Feline
Sept 7, 2008 8:49:31 GMT -7
Post by Ink® on Sept 7, 2008 8:49:31 GMT -7
Aww, it's cute, but the second line needs to be one more sylable. Forever is only 3 not 4.
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Feline
Sept 7, 2008 9:14:17 GMT -7
Post by canadaboy on Sept 7, 2008 9:14:17 GMT -7
um i dont like second line wording
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